[quote name='Chacrana']Well, stuff like "many serious societal issues" makes you sound like a prick. There's definitely a way to say that that'll flow better. Like "the characters serve as vehicles for the pressing societal issues of the time" or some shit. That's cheezy as
, but whatev. You know what I'm gettin' at. You also sorta repeat yo-self in that last sentence... You gotta be like "yo, the most prominant displays are (insert some characters here)"... you don't wanna sound redundant.
Anyway, I got back from Body of Lies and it was aight. Pretty derivative and the characters were as one-dimensional as anything I've ever seen, but it was still entertaining enough that I didn't feel robbed. I'd give it a 6/10, so that's... well, decent. If your friends wanna drag you to it, do it. It's not Wanted, after all! Still, it's a disappointment given how
ing good American Ghangsta was.
So look outside. See what I see? Well, it's dark out. That means Hellsing Ultimate Vol. 4!
I have waited an entire year for a new vol., so this had
better kick ass.[/quote]
Thanks chac, I'll change it around a bit.
LIke I said, I can't write for shit. I figure I can get this done by 7 a.m. even with frequent video game breaks.
I hope this doesn't
up my originality report on turnitin.com lol.